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== =THE VISUAL PROJECT=

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 * (1)During the period of depression ,people were busily surrounded by suffering ,and the whole society** **Of California spun out of control . Police however, had less power to enforce their authorities, which meat killing was almost free . View from this angle, a character like George ,who appeared in Steinbeck ‘s novel** **// Of Mice and Men //** **,did not need to concerned whether he would be captured or not when he pursued to kill Lennie. Therefore ,George had more space to think about why his friend must die. Steinbeck wrote the conclusion to this book ,in a way that revealed how George’s decisions to kill Lennie were made, and that showed this killing was actually a kindness.**
 * (2) First and the foremost, a quote strongly states that George desired to kill Lennie by himself . The old man Candy said that :”I ought to of shot that dog myself ,George . I shouldn't ought to of let no stranger shoot my dog . "The way Candy thought about killing his dog deeply affected George's decision of shooting Lennie .For Candy ,the only dependence in his life was the dog .When it forced to be killed by a stranger but not himself ,Candy regretted .Same as George ,they have experienced the past life together ,and he took the responsibility to Lennie ,hence ,he won’t let any one else hurt Lennie .**
 * (3) Additionally, Lennie would die peacefully with the dream which they were always excited of .George didn’t want those people to frighten his friend .He soothed Lennie that :"You ...an' me .Ever'body gonna be nice to you .Ain't gonna be no more trouble ."This was the last time they talked about the dream .George did not describe more details about how to manage the farm ,however , he repeated the better life in their dream. He persuaded Lennie go to find it now .Dream is beautiful , especially for a mental ,and a pure guy .Since Curley’s wife had been killed ,their dream disappeared as well .George understood that they were deep in trouble and their lives got be more difficult .He expected that his friend could live with their hope and avoid those harms .**
 * (4) Readers may discuss that they can run away just like last time they run from Weed .In fact, the situation does not allow them to escape from the trouble. Even if Lennie survives, he might harm others again .Lennie has extremely powerful strength that caused the pup ,and Curley’s wife died innocently . He muttered toward the dead pup that :” Why do you got to get killed? You ain’t so little as mice. I didn’t bounce you hard.” Lennie could not control his power to handle things ,especially when he touched the soft things .If they ran away and got in a new place which like the Weed , or the ranch, and there is another woman like the red-dress girl ,or Curley’s wife ,Lennie might take off a new life with his strong hands. George always thought more about their future. He had no idea to save his mental friend .The pup’s death also stands for Curley’s wife’s disaster. Lennie’s hands represent trouble which means that he would kill more lives .**
 * (5)Killing ,however, indicates a optimistic side to reduce Lennie ‘s suffering . However, Candy ’s opinion , Curley ‘s threat, and Lennie ‘s low mentality strongly influence George’s decisions of killing his best friend. Finally ,the readers will realize that, why the killing is known as a mercy killing ,and how difficult for George to press the trigger.**

**Jane’s editing for meaning**


 * (1) **** Of Mice and Men ,Steinbeck’s novel ,which describes one character like George who traveled together with another mental guy Lennie, and they worked on a ranch in California during the Great Depression .Steinbeck wrote the conclusion to this book ,in a way that revealed how George’s decisions to kill Lennie were made, and that showed this killing was actually a kindness. **
 * I think you may need to add some more useful background information that related to your thesis, and change your introduction paragraph more attractive. **
 * (2) First and the foremost, a quote strongly states that George desires to kill Lennie by himself . The old man Candy said that :”I ought to of shot that dog myself ,George . I shouldn't ought to of let no stranger shoot my dog . "The way of Candy thinks about killing his dog deeply affects George's decision of shooting Lennie .For Candy ,the only dependence in his life is the dog .When it forced to be killed by a stranger but not himself ,Candy regrets .Same as George ,he takes the responsibility to Lennie ,hence ,he won’t let any one else hurt Lennie .The other reason for killing Lennie is also attracts people’s eyes. **
 * I am confused about your last sentence’s purpose. I suggest you could make some connection in here instead of writing a transition. **
 * (3) Additionally, Lennie will die peacefully with the dream which they are always excited of .He doesn’t want those people to frighten Lennie .George soothes him that :"You ...an' me .Ever'body gonna be nice to you .Ain't gonna be no more trouble .Nobody gonna hurt nobody nor steal from 'em ."This is the last time they talk about the dream .George does not describe more details of managing the farm ,however , he repeats the better life in their dream. He persuades Lennie go to find it now .Dream is beautiful , especially for a mental ,and a pure guy .Since Curley’s wife has died ,their dream disappear as well .George knows that they are deep in trouble and their lives get be more difficult .He expects that his friend can live with their hope and avoid those harms .Readers may discuss that they can run away just like last time they run from Weed .In fact, the situation does not allow them to escape from the trouble. **
 * I think your quote is a little bit long, you could shorten it simpler. And you may talk more about the reason why George and Lennie could not run away this time. **
 * (4) Above all ,even if Lennie survives, he may harm others again .Lennie has extremely powerful strength that caused the pup ,and Curley’s wife died innocently . He mutters toward the dead pup that :” Why do you got to get killed? You ain’t so little as mice. I didn’t bounce you hard.”Lennie can not control his power to handle things ,especially when he touches the soft things .If they run away and get to a new place which like the Weed, the ranch, and there is another woman like the red-dress girl and Curley’s wife ,Lennie may take off a new life with his strong hands. George always thinks more about their future. He has no idea to save his mental friend.The pup’s death also stands for Curley’s wife’s disaster. Lennie’s hands stand for trouble which means that he would kill more lives . **
 * (5)Killing ,however, played a positive role to reduce Lennie ‘s suffering .Steinbeck drew a scene of mercy killing , and to prove the deeper meaning of George’s decisions . **
 * For the conclusion, you should restate your thesis statement clearly and in details. And connect with contents that you talk about above. **



Linda’s editing to grammar ** (1) Of Mice and Men, Steinbeck’s novel, which **// described //** one character like George who traveled together with another mental guy Lennie, and they worked on a ranch in California during the Great Depression .Steinbeck wrote the conclusion to this book, in a way that revealed how George’s decisions to kill Lennie were made, and that showed this killing was actually a kindness. (2) First and the foremost, a quote strongly **// stated //** that George desires to kill Lennie by himself. The old man Candy said that, “I ought to of shot that dog myself, George. I shouldn’t ought to **// have //** let no stranger shoot my dog. "The way of Candy **// thought about //** killing his dog deeply affects George's decision of shooting Lennie .For Candy ,the only dependence in his life **// was //** the dog .When it forced to be killed by a stranger but not himself ,Candy **// regretted //** .Same as George ,he **// took //** the responsibility to Lennie ,hence ,he won’t let any one else hurt Lennie .The other reason for killing Lennie **// was //** also attracts people’s eyes. (3) In addition, Lennie **// would //** die peacefully with the dream which they **// were //** always excited of .He **// didn’t //** want those people to frighten Lennie .George soothed him that,” You ...an' me .Ever'body gonna be nice to you .Ain't gonna be no more trouble .Nobody gonna hurt nobody nor steal from ‘em.”This **//was//** the last time **// that //** they talk about the dream .George **// did //** not describe more details of managing the farm, **// but //** he **// repeated //** the better life in their dream. He **// persuaded //** Lennie go to find it now .Dream is beautiful, especially for a mental, and a pure guy .Since Curley’s wife **// had //** died, their dream **// disappeared //** as well .George **// knew //** that they **// were //** deep in trouble and their lives **// got //** be more difficult .He **// expected //** that his friend **// could //** live with their hope and **// avoided //** those harms .Readers **// might discuss that they could //** run away just like last time they run from Weed .In fact, the situation **//did//** not allow them to escape from the trouble. (4) Above all, even if Lennie **// survived, he might //** harm others again .Lennie had extremely powerful strength that caused the pup, and Curley’s wife died innocently. He mutters toward the dead pup that, “Why do you got to get killed? You ain’t so little as mice. I didn’t bounce you hard.” Lennie **// could //** not control his power to handle things, especially when he **// touched //** the soft things .If they **// ran away and got //** to a new place **// which liked //** the Weed, the ranch, and there **// was //** another woman like the red-dress girl and Curley’s wife, Lennie **// might //** take off a new life with his strong hands. George always **// thought //** more about their future. He **//had//** no idea to save his mental friend. The pup’s death also **// stood //** for Curley’s wife’s disaster. Lennie’s hands stood for trouble which meant that he would kill more lives. (5)Killing, however, played a positive role to reduce Lennie‘s suffering .Steinbeck drew a scene of mercy killing, and to prove the deeper meaning of George’s decisions.

Regina's Edit:
(1) Of Mice and Men ,Steinbeck’s novel ,which describes one character like George who traveled together with another mental guy Lennie, and they worked on a ranch in California during the Great Depression .Steinbeck wrote the conclusion to this book ,in a way that revealed how George’s decisions to kill Lennie were made, and that showed this killing was actually a kindness.

(2) First and the foremost, a quote strongly states that George desires to kill Lennie by himself. The old man Candy said that:”I ought to of shot that dog myself ,George. I shouldn't ought to of let no stranger shoot my dog. "The way of Candy thinks about killing his dog deeply affects George's decision of shooting Lennie .For Candy ,the only dependence in his life is (was) the dog .When it forced to be killed by a stranger but not himself ,Candy regrets .Same as George ,he takes the responsibility to Lennie ,hence ,he won’t let any one else hurt Lennie .The other reason for killing Lennie is also for attracting people’s eyes.

(3) Additionally, Lennie will die peacefully with the dream which they are (were) always excited of .He doesn’t want those people to frighten Lennie .George soothes him that :"You ...an' me .Ever'body gonna be nice to you .Ain't gonna be no more trouble .Nobody gonna hurt nobody nor steal from 'em ."This is the last time they talk about the dream .George does not describe more details of managing the farm ,however , he repeats the better life in their dream. He persuades Lennie go to find it now .Dream is beautiful, especially for a mental ,and a pure guy .Since Curley’s wife has died ,their dream disappear as well .George knows that they are deep in trouble and their lives get be more difficult .He expects that his friend can live with their hope and avoid those harms .Readers may discuss that they can run away just like last time they run (away) from Weed .In fact, the situation does not allow them to escape from the trouble.

(4) Above all ,even if Lennie survives, he may harm others again .Lennie has extremely powerful strength that caused the pup ,and Curley’s wife died innocently. He mutters toward the dead pup that :” Why do you got to get killed? You ain’t so little as mice. I didn’t bounce you hard.” Lennie can not control his power to handle things ,especially when he touches the soft things .If they run away and get to a new place which like the Weed, the ranch, and there is another woman like the red-dress girl and Curley’s wife ,Lennie may take off a new life with his strong hands. George always thinks more about their future. He has no idea to save his mental friend. The pup’s death also stands for Curley’s wife’s disaster. Lennie’s hands stand for trouble which means that he would kill more lives.

(5)Killing, however, played a positive role to reduce Lennie ‘s suffering .Steinbeck drew a scene of mercy killing, and to prove the deeper meaning of George’s decisions.

= = Of Mice and Men ,Steinbeck’s novel ,which describes one character like George who traveled together with another mental guy Lennie, and they worked on a ranch in California during the Great Depression .Steinbeck wrote the conclusion to this book ,in a way that revealed how George’s decision to kill Lennie was made, and that showed this killing was actually a kindness. ** = =
 * Memory- grammar
 * To begin with, a quote strongly states that **
 * George desired to kill Lennie by himself . The old **
 * man Candy said :” (:")I ought to of shot that dog myself ,George . I shouldn't ought to of let no stranger shoot my dog . "The way of Candy thinks about killing his dog deeply affects George's decision of shooting Lennie .For Candy ,the only dependence in his life is the dog .When it forced to be killed by a stranger but not himself ,Candy regrets .Same as George ,he takes the responsibility to Lennie ,hence ,he won’t let any one else hurt Lennie .The other reason for killing Lennie is also attracts people’s eyes. **
 * In addition, Lennie will die peacefully with the dream which they are always excited of .He doesn’t want those people to frighten Lennie .George soothes him that :"You ...an' me .Ever'body gonna be nice to you .Ain't gonna be no more trouble .Nobody gonna hurt nobody nor steal from 'em ."This is the last time they talk about the dream .George does not describe more details of managing the farm ,however , he repeats the better life in their dream. He persuades Lennie go to find it now .Dream is beautiful , especially for a mental ,and a pure guy .Since Curley’s wife has died ,their dream **
 * disappear as well .George knows that they are deep in trouble and their lives get be more difficult .He expects that his friend can live with their hope and avoid those harms .Readers may discuss that they can run away just like last time they run from Weed .In fact, the situation does not allow them to escape from the trouble. **
 * Above all ,even if Lennie survives, he may harm others again .Lennie has extremely powerful strength that caused the pup ,and Curley’s wife died innocently . He mutters toward the dead pup that :” Why do you got to get killed? You ain’t so little as mice. I didn’t bounce you hard.”Lennie can not control his power to handle things ,especially when he touches the soft things .If they run away and get to a new place which like the Weed, the ranch, and there is another woman like the red-dress girl and Curley’s wife ,Lennie may take off a new life with his strong hands. George always thinks more about their future. He has no idea to save his mental friend. The pup’s death also stands for Curley’s wife’s disaster. Lennie’s hands stand for trouble which means that he would kill more lives. **
 * Killing, however, plays a positive role to reduce Lennie‘s suffering .Steinbeck draws a scene of mercy killing, and to prove the deeper meaning of George’s decisions. **

= = = ZOEY'S ESSAY-THE ROUGH COPY =


 * (1) Of Mice and Men ,Steinbeck’s novel ,which describes one character like George who traveled together with another mental guy Lennie, and they worked on a ranch in California during the Great Depression . **** Steinbeck wrote the conclusion to this book ,in a way that revealed how George’s decisions to kill Lennie were made, and that showed this killing was actually a kindness. **
 * (2) First and the foremost, a quote strongly states that George desires to kill Lennie by himself . The old man Candy said that :”I ought to of shot that dog myself ,George . I shouldn't ought to of let no stranger shoot my dog . "The way of Candy thinks about killing his dog deeply affects George's decision of shooting Lennie .For Candy ,the only dependence in his life is the dog .When it forced to be killed by a stranger but not himself ,Candy regrets .Same as George ,he takes the responsibility to Lennie ,hence ,he won’t let any one else hurt Lennie .The other reason for killing Lennie is also attracts people’s eyes. **
 * (3) Additionally, Lennie will d **** ie peacefully with the dream which they are always excited of .He doesn’t want those people to frighten Lennie .George soothes him that : **** "You ...an' me .Ever'body gonna be nice to you .Ain't gonna be no more trouble .Nobody gonna hurt nobody nor steal from 'em ."This is the last time they talk about the dream .George does not describe more details of managing the farm ,however , he repeats the better life in their dream. He persuades Lennie go to find it now .Dream is beautiful , especially for a mental ,and a pure guy .Since Curley’s wife has died ,their dream disappear as well .George knows that they are deep in trouble and their lives get be more difficult .He expects that his friend can live with their hope and avoid those harms .Readers may discuss that they can run away just like last time they run from Weed .In fact, the situation does not allow them to escape from the trouble. **
 * (4) Above all ,even if Lennie survives, he may harm others again .Lennie has extremely powerful strength that caused the pup ,and Curley’s wife died innocently . He mutters toward the dead pup that :” Why do you got to get killed? You ain’t so little as mice. I didn’t bounce you hard.”Lennie can not control his power to handle things ,especially when he touches the soft things .If they run away and get to a new place which like the Weed, the ranch, and there is another woman like the red-dress girl and Curley’s wife ,Lennie may take off a new life with his strong hands. George always thinks more about their future. He has no idea to save his mental friend.The pup’s death also stands for Curley’s wife’s disaster. Lennie’s hands stand for trouble which means that he would kill more lives . **
 * (5)Killing ,however, played a positive role to reduce Lennie ‘s suffering .Steinbeck drew a scene of mercy killing , and to prove the deeper meaning of George’s decisions . **

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=ZOEY'S OUTLINE=

// Background Information : During the Great Depression ,even the police would not care about who was killed spitefully .Hence, murderers were reckless .// ** // Hook : A bang ended a person’s life .Who knew why this man held the gun toward his best friend ,and why there was no regret in his eyes? // // Thesis Statement: //
 * Introduction:

Steinbeck describes the scene of the novel’s ending for showing how George’s decision is made, and why the killing reveals kindness.

// Topic Sentence ://__**George wants to kill** **Lennie by himself.**__ // Point //://The way of Candy thinks about killing his dog deeply affects George's decision of shooting Lennie.// // Evidence //: "I ought to of shot that dog myself,George. I shouldn't ought to of let no stranger shoot my dog." // Explanation //:The relationship between Candy and his old dog is similar to George and Lennies'.For Candy,the only dependence in his life is the dog.When it forced to be killed,Candy regrets to let a stranger end the dog's life.Same as George,he takes the responsbility to Lennie,and he is also a part of George's life ,he will kill Lennie when the death is the better choice for him. // Connection //: Candy says that to George very sudden and shows how he feels about the dog’s death.It can remind the readers that George ‘s decision has been affected. // Conclusion/Transition Sentence ://// The other reason for killing Lennie is also attracts people’s eyes. //
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 * Body Paragraph 2:**

Topic Sentence :Lennie will die peacefully with the dream which they are always excited of.
// Point //:George wants him to die with the dream since they cannot make their dream comes true. He doesn’t want those people to frighten Lennie. // Evidence //:"You ...an' me.Ever'body gonnabe nice to you.Ain't gonna be no more trouble.Nobody gonna hurt nobody nor steal from 'em." // Explantion //:Dream is beautiful, especially for a mental ,and a pure guy.Since Curley’s wife has died ,their dream disappear as well .George knows that they are deep in trouble and their lives get be more difficult.George expects that his friend can live with their hope and avoid those harms. // Connection //:This is the last time they talk about the dream .George does not describe more details of managing the farm ,however, he repeats the better life in their dream. He persuades Lennie go to find it now. // Transition Sentence : People may ask, why don’t they run away , // // Transition Sentence :People may ask, why don’t they run away , just like last time they run from Weed ? In fact, the situation does not allow them to escape. //


 * Body Paragraph 3:**

Topic sentence :Even if Lennie survives, he may harm others again. Point :Lennie has extremely powerful strength .That caused the pup ,and Curley’s wife died innocently. Evidence : ” Why do you got to get killed? You ain’t so little as mice. I didn’t bounce you hard.” Explanation : Lennie cannot control his power to handle things ,especially when he touched the soft things .If they ran away and got to a new place which like the Weed, the ranch, and there was another woman like the red-dress girl and Curley’s wife ,Lennie might take off a new life with his strong hands. George always thought about the future. He had no idea to save his mental friend. Connection : The pup’s death also stands for Curley’s wife’s disaster. Lennie’s hands means trouble .He would kill more lives. Transition Sentence :Killing ,however, plays a positive role to reduce Lennie ‘s suffering. // Thesis //: The author draws a scene of mercy killing, and to prove the deeper meaning of George’s decisions.
 * Conclusion **

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